neil said:dabur da chananparkash khaya kar
poori taran ee rogmukt ho jaan tain fer
jatti_sydney said:appan poori tara hi rog mukat haan...........chananparkarsh ya chawanprakash khaan di lod ni ........
neil said:gode keehde dukhde aa
mast_malang_munda said:nice poetry
maxsteel panga na lei yar
inna sohna likheya jatti ne
dont discourage her
Maxsteel said:dnt worry ,,,uhh nahi hundi discourge.meri ladoo bhua haii.h h
Sandhu said:Great work , actually main ve ek vari ehi thought la ke poem likhan di koshish kiti se. Par main 2 lines toon aage likh hi nahi sakiya. Kyonki es bare likhan lai ek eho jiha experience chahida hai jo har kisi kol nahi hunda. Really i don'thave words. Really amazing. Plz keep it up. mainu es toon bahut kuch sikhan nu miliya. thanx for that
jatti_sydney said:thanks bhaji for the halla sheri I'll try...vaise tusi kehde thought di gal kar rahe ho ithe....bahli tareef larti tusi.....oh te main kadekade dukhi hoi likh dinni haan vaise dukhi ghat hi hunni haan........
Sandhu said:Ehne ki kisi nu dukhi karna, her thoughts are really very pure and sweet, plz observe her thoughts.
Maxsteel said:lol sandhu saab eve likho ,,,dhukhi jayada kardi haanrolf rolf rolf rolf
Maxsteel said:kudi nahi meri bhua ne .